Title: Ice Queen
Word Count: 65,000
Song: Human by Christina Perri
Pitch:
The Angel Experiment meets The Snow Queen when sixteen-year-old Arianna Lewis falls for her hottie new neighbor. If she can’t figure out how to control her ice juice, it’s bye-bye sleepy beach town…hello frozen wasteland.
250:
For the love of all things not genetically modified, please let me get to the bus without a Jeremy Watters run-in.
Racing though the empty gym, I slam my backpack into the double doors as the final bell rings. Almost there—
“Hey Ice Queen, I’ve got something to thaw you off.”
You’ve got to be kidding me.
I stop short of slamming into his overly inflated chest. My fingertips tingle as the sneer spreads across his face. I dig my nails into my palms to avoid another accident. Two in one day is too risky.
Jeremy casually folds his pumped biceps across his chest, flipping that damn toothpick between his teeth. If only he’d choke on it. Sucking in a calming breath, I choke on the musky air burning the back of my throat.
“Geeze, didn’t anyone ever teach you how to spray cologne?” I let out a gagged cough and hold up a finger, “One squirt. That crap isn’t air-freshener. People need to breathe.”
“Come on Ice Queen, it’s no secret you can’t resist the love potion. Your temperature’s rising just thinking about it.”
Somehow he drags the word love into five syllables as he grabs his crotch and licks his lips prompting me to dry heave. Hard to believe a year ago he used to sneak in my window at night to avoid his parents’ knockdown arguments.
“Oh Jeremy, your tiny package couldn’t thaw out a popsicle.”
“Dude, she burned you,” one of his cronies shouts.
This is so not going to end well.
I chose to save Ice Queen because the character’s voice stood out above all the entries. It captured my attention and had me wanting to read more. Saved! @agirlnamednat, Team Stray Tats Talent Scout
I’d like to award this band member a Gold Record!
I love the pitch for this entry (I’m a big fan of the MAXIMUM RIDE books) and Arianna’s voice really comes across in the sample pages. Love the sparky dialogue (it reminded me of VERONICA MARS in places)! If you’d be interested in querying me with this, I’d love to read more!
My submission guidelines:
Please send a query letter (including author bio) and the requested pages (attached as a Word/rtf file) to “submissions[at]broadlandliterary[dot]com” with the subject line “Pitch Slam Submission – Your Novel’s Title (Genre)”.
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Hey there! I realize this is somewhat offtopic but I had to ask. ebkdbbdedceg
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